First off, I love the design of the website for your project. The layout is very different from the others I have seen, which I like. On the introduction page, the font is really small for the quotes though. I’ve done the same thing on one of my posts not realizing that the published size is actually miniscule not “small” like it says :D I also like the way you chose the 2 column layout instead of one. It makes the short paragraphs seem substantial, but it also makes it easier to read, if that makes sense. Also, I don’t know if you had planned on doing this or not, but I would make the last sentence, “Will you come with me?” a link to the next page in your storybook.
I love the idea of the rabbit stories across cultures. I find it so fascinating how a lot of cultures have the same stories, just slightly different. I also have found it interesting how Disney has pulled different folktales and turned them into classic children’s movies. Genius!
Hey Avery! I just read the introduction of your storybook project. It looks like the start of an awesome project so far! I really like the bright colors of your website they make your homepage really pop. I think the way you decided to set up an outline of your stories was really clever. Utilizing a travel plan to cover various portions of the world to tell their stories is really creative. Your introduction flowed really nicely and I think the direction you decided to go in will help you a lot as your project progresses. The velveteen rabbit was one of my favorite stories as a child so I also love that you included those quotes at the beginning. I think that particular quote set can be applied to many walks of life and it’s interesting to think about what it could mean in different lights. I hope your project continues to go well!
Okay so I really love how you've designed your website. I love that the story is split into columns and the paragraphs are big blocks within those columns. I also really like that you bolded the first sentence or few words of every paragraph. It definitely makes the story easy to follow, and really helps you to get back on track after the dialogue from Brer.
I love that you included the dialogue, but kept it to a relative minimum. It does really highlight Brer's heritage, but you're right, it could detract from the story.
I really loved your introduction as well, but I think I felt a little bit confused going into your first story. I thought I was on the right track in deciphering what your theme was overall and I ended up being right, but it might be helpful to explain a little more explicitly what your goal is within your story book.
Your website layout and colors make the storybook seem so inviting and I could tell some thought had been put into it. I read the introduction and really liked the structure of it. The paragraphs being in columns like they are made the site look better than just going straight down the page. The "Will you come with me?" button to take you to your first story was really innovative. I might have to steal that from you. The bolded words at the start of every paragraph made it easy to follow and read though. Great job on the introduction.
I then read the story of Africa in your storybook. The fact that you used the language of Brer Rabbit throughout this story was really great. I feel like it makes the reader that much more invested in the story. My only real suggestion here is to possibily break up the first paragraph into two separate ones. It seems somewhat long compared to the others but it is really not that big of deal. It didn't distract from the story whatsoever and it was only a real general thing I saw. Great start to your storybook. It is coming together very nicely!
Hey Avery! I really love the layout of your website. The central alignment works really well with the structuring of your paragraphs in two columns. It makes for a really nice visual presentation of your writing. The bolding of the first parts of each paragraph make it really easy to follow along and see the separation. Also it helps if you're going back through rereading looking for a certain part. I really like the basis of your storybook. I like the fact that you are using one character and then taking us on a journey to all these different places to meet other characters. It really feels like we are going on an adventure with the rabbit Oak. I liked the fact that you seem to be giving us 3 images with each story. These images really give us a visual of where Oak is traveling to and help us imagine the setting. I hope you keep up with that for your last 2 stories. I also really like your links to the next story at the end of the current stories. This really helps create a sense of continuity with your story as we transition from one page to the next very smoothly.
Your storybook is exceedingly well done! It read like a travel diary in The New Yorker or something. I especially thought that the design of your introduction and the continuity between each subsequent post. The column-style that you used for the text was excellent; it gives the story a sense of urgency, much like a newspaper clipping or other journalistic-type publication. Is this what you were shooting for? If so, you've succeeded?
Also, the way in which you opened the story entitled "Africa" was wonderful. I felt as though I could've been stepping out onto the tarmac along with Oak.
The dialogue you use - especially the colloquialism that you endow to Brer - is fantastic. It kept the story fresh and yet stylistically correct.
The only critique I have is that sometimes, the bolded font at the onset of each paragraph was a bit distracting -- and that just seems like a lot of work for the author! Just a thought.
Well done. I look forward to reading the rest of your project!
Hey, Avery! I love the quote for your introduction – it was a really good way to start. I also really liked how you made the first sentence or first part of the sentence bold-faced text – that makes the blog look so professional as well as break up the paragraphs. The introduction was extremely well-written and lays out the storybook in an organized manner. I thought that was really neat and I haven’t seen an introduction done quite like the way you did it before. Also, having a link on the page to the next story in the form of a question was very creative. For the Africa story, everything from Brer’s dialect to the explanation at the bottom of the story that “goober” means “peanut” was great – I’m very impressed. I can’t think of any improvements. Everything from the pictures to the formatting to the story itself was extremely well-done. I am very excited to read more of your stories!
Avery!!!! I've come to creep on you! I opened up the roster for Myth-Folklore and couldn't help but click on your name when I saw it. Your site is absolutely so wonderfully done. The layout is easy to navigate. The neutral color scheme is simple, letting your writing really shine. The idea of traveling from country to country and telling a story along the way is such a cool idea. Opening with the quote in the beginning of the introduction really opens the topic well- your choice would seem a little unexplained otherwise. The way you opened each paragraph with a bolded line lets us as readers move on to each idea. Involving the quotes of the story into your story is quite nice as well. It gives so much explanation for the inspiration to your story, without having to actually explain yourself. It’s a genius idea. I am so glad that I've gotten to accidentally run across your little Storybook. It was really a treat!
Hi Avery! I love the layout of your storybook project. The central alignment of the tabs for the introduction and each story make your site very easy to navigate. The column format that you used in your writing worked very well. It made the stories flow nicely and I liked how you bolded the beginning line of each section in the columns. I also love the concept of your story. Once I graduate, I really want to travel so your themes of travel and adventure and discovering the World ad who you are really hit home with me and drew me in. You did a great job with your first story. When I read Brer Rabbit during our Africa unit, I found it kind of difficult to navigate through all of the dialect. It was very smart of you to stay true to the dialect by writing Brer’s speaking parts using dialect rather than writing the entire story in dialect. I really enjoyed your story and am excited to read more.
I love the design of your blog. It is so clean and easy to read. By using the white background the person's eye is drawn to the important stuff . . . the words. Also it is kind of like a piece of paper with typing on it. I also like the font. Yep. Yep. Your blog is pretty awesome!
Hey, Avery! I really like how your blog is organized. The white background is very clean-cut and helps your labels, text, and Pinterest board stand out. Speaking of labels and pinterest board, I love how the colors of the pinterest board pop and how the labels are written in a simple text but how it also looks so elegant. Keep up the wonderful work!
Avery, first of all, I really like your site theme and layout. It is my favorite that I have seen on the Google sites platform so far. It goes perfectly with your theme and is very simple yet pleasing to the eye. The text layout is easy to read and looks somewhat like an article layout (which is very clever). The tabs are all easy to find and self-explanatory. Great job on the site! Your introduction was very well written. It was extremely clever how you broke the stories/ places out into paragraphs (with the first sentence bold). It made the introduction easy to follow and it gave a great preview to what is ahead. My favorite part of your introduction was the phrase “I’ve lost the Thumper in me.” I think that resonates with most people, regardless of age. You really did an excellent job from the layout to the art choices. I cannot wait to read more!
First off, I really like the way you organized your blog. The welcome page is clean and simple, but it sparked my interest to read your stories. Well done. I also like the background picture you chose and the neutral colors. It is calming to look at and creates a nice environment to read your stories.
I enjoyed reading your introduction. I haven't read or thought about the Velveteen Rabbit since I was a little kid, so thanks for taking such great childhood book and reminding me of my younger years. Kind of nostalgic.
I read your stories of Africa and India. I thought it was a really cool idea to title each story a different place and features a new adventure. I particularly liked the line in India, "The opposite of foolishness is wisdom." I thought all your sentences flowed nicely and the paragraphs were organized well.
Your project is unique. I have read a lot of different portfolios and storybooks by now and I really like the creative approach you took. I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future!
I am so glad that you changed the last line of the Introduction to a link to the next page. It really allows you to just keep in the moment instead of having to scroll back up and try to figure out what you need to click on next. Most people can do that, but I have a very short attention span, so when I start something any little thing can make me “squirrel” LOL I also like how you put different pictures up on each page that corresponds with the place. It’s almost like he is posting pictures of his travels :) I also loved your Brer Rabbit story. You really kept the spirit of the stories all the way through the telling of it. I really enjoyed the India story. I haven’t read any of the India folktales so it was nice to get to read one and, it was funny. Poor little guy! It reminded me of chicken little.
RE: Avery, I am a great lover of Jane Austen and almost all of her books (except Northranger Abbey; I just could not enjoy it), so thank you so much for comparing my writing with hers. I love that era of writing as well. My favorite Jane Austen novels are Persuasion and Mansfield Park; both are so scandalous and endearing. Thanks for taking the time to read my stories :)
Hey Avery, I would like to say that I really appreciate you leaving comments on my blog. I know it is an assignment but all feedback is worth it. I am glad that you enjoyed reading my project. I think it is cool that I can write something for others to enjoy. I will work on those things that you suggested I need improvement on. Thanks!
I just read your post entitled "India" and enjoyed the crisp, varied diction you used and the brief paragraphs that made the story flow quite nicely. Also, the site's design is great; it's both aesthetically pleasing and organized. I had read one of your stories before and wanted to read another, so thanks for writing your stories into one continuous narrative.
My one critique is that your writing seems to lack a good deal of dialogue. While I understand that Brer's journey is kept in a sort of journal, and the reader is privy to his thoughts along the way, the minimal dialogue made the story slightly difficult to follow at times. I found myself wondering where the narration was going and feeling like the overall tone of the story was one of nostalgia, yet the nostalgia was not enhanced by a sense of an "active" storytelling.
Despite this, the overall design and theme for your story was well done. You illustrated the theme well at the end of the story but avoided being too obvious about it, which seems hard to do.
Nice work. I'll look forward to reading the rest of your stories.
First of all, I absolutely love how you set up your website. The split columns of text is so unique! All of the other storybooks I've seen have just had one big clump. Also, the links to the next story at the end of the current story make it so easy to maneuver through your storybook. I read the Introduction and Africa. I am also excited to read Australia. I've been obsessed with this country lately and want to see what stories come out of the region. The quote at the top of the Introduction page is lovely. I've never heard anything like it before! It took me a bit to relate it to the stories in your book, but I think it has to do with comparing Real to adventure. It might hurt a little on the path to adventure, but it's totally worth it. I thought it would be cool to include a conclusion page of sorts and write how this quote ties into your storybook. You've done a wonderful job setting this up. Keep writing!
Wow, Avery! Your storybook is incredible! Seriously, I've seen many good projects and good-looking projects, but yours is just phenomenal. First of all, it looks amazing. It looks like a professionally put together website. The layout, the little touches in the text design, and the pictures all come together to make this polished-looking, whole piece. Your writing is just as good as your design. Again I have to use the word professional because it sounds like the introduction and story I read (Africa with Brer Rabbit) were written by a pro author. I read and rewrote my own version of the Brer Rabbit and Brer Bear story, so I knew the background material well and you nailed it. The dialogue sounds exactly like Brer Rabbit; you really captured his spirit in the story. Overall, your project is a smash hit with me. It looks great and it sounds great. Really awesome job.
Avery, I've commented before and I am glad I got to come back and see how your storybook ended up. I read the story "India" this time around. I really enjoyed how your story had a real meaning behind it. Following "blindly" can definitely lead to some embarrassing situations. I also thought it was very cool how you included a little Indo-Aryan language into the story by naming Oak's uncle Ajan. Once again, your picture selection and layout of your website make it extremely easy to read and navigate. This is one of the best and organized storybooks I have seen this semester. I really like how Oak's entire journey is shaping him as you stated. Your author's note was very thorough and explained every little nuisance in your story that alluded to your creativity. It also showed exactly your thoughts and the direction you were trying to achieve. I'd say you did it. You've done a really awesome job on this!
Avery, I'm so sad I'm just now seeing your Storybook! I love it! I mean, seriously, it's great. For starters, the layout that you chose is so great! The layout and background help the project stand out in the best way. I also love the images you chose! They seemed so clean and fresh. I've read your storytelling posts throughout the semester, and it's been so nice to see that your storytelling style has remained consistent. I really enjoyed reading your introduction. The quote at the beginning was so fitting! Everything just went together so well. Your writing was also really easy to read and kept me interested. The beginning also reminded me a little bit of the Hobbit! I read the rest of the tales in your project, and I just adored everything. Your writing also gave me an insane case of wanderlust! I think this has been one of my favorite Storybooks this semester. Wonderful job!
What a great story. I really fell in love with rabbit. I am a big fan of stepping out of my comfort zone; it is the best way to grow as a person. That being said I loved how rabbit decided to step out and see the world. I liked how in your intro he went back and for on living his nice little town. He was happy there, but you did a good job expressing his curiosity and how it got the better of him for good reasons. Once he finally got out and did it, he seemed to not regret his decision. For school’s sake I wont be finishing your storybook this semester; however, when I find time I will. I really want to see what happens with rabbit in the other countries besides Africa. Your story has defiantly got my attention and curiosity and it wont be satisfied until I finish your storybook.
First off, I love the design of the website for your project. The layout is very different from the others I have seen, which I like. On the introduction page, the font is really small for the quotes though. I’ve done the same thing on one of my posts not realizing that the published size is actually miniscule not “small” like it says :D I also like the way you chose the 2 column layout instead of one. It makes the short paragraphs seem substantial, but it also makes it easier to read, if that makes sense. Also, I don’t know if you had planned on doing this or not, but I would make the last sentence, “Will you come with me?” a link to the next page in your storybook.
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of the rabbit stories across cultures. I find it so fascinating how a lot of cultures have the same stories, just slightly different. I also have found it interesting how Disney has pulled different folktales and turned them into classic children’s movies. Genius!
Hey Avery! I just read the introduction of your storybook project. It looks like the start of an awesome project so far! I really like the bright colors of your website they make your homepage really pop. I think the way you decided to set up an outline of your stories was really clever. Utilizing a travel plan to cover various portions of the world to tell their stories is really creative. Your introduction flowed really nicely and I think the direction you decided to go in will help you a lot as your project progresses. The velveteen rabbit was one of my favorite stories as a child so I also love that you included those quotes at the beginning. I think that particular quote set can be applied to many walks of life and it’s interesting to think about what it could mean in different lights. I hope your project continues to go well!
ReplyDeleteHi Avery!
ReplyDeleteOkay so I really love how you've designed your website. I love that the story is split into columns and the paragraphs are big blocks within those columns. I also really like that you bolded the first sentence or few words of every paragraph. It definitely makes the story easy to follow, and really helps you to get back on track after the dialogue from Brer.
I love that you included the dialogue, but kept it to a relative minimum. It does really highlight Brer's heritage, but you're right, it could detract from the story.
I really loved your introduction as well, but I think I felt a little bit confused going into your first story. I thought I was on the right track in deciphering what your theme was overall and I ended up being right, but it might be helpful to explain a little more explicitly what your goal is within your story book.
Great job!
Your website layout and colors make the storybook seem so inviting and I could tell some thought had been put into it. I read the introduction and really liked the structure of it. The paragraphs being in columns like they are made the site look better than just going straight down the page. The "Will you come with me?" button to take you to your first story was really innovative. I might have to steal that from you. The bolded words at the start of every paragraph made it easy to follow and read though. Great job on the introduction.
ReplyDeleteI then read the story of Africa in your storybook. The fact that you used the language of Brer Rabbit throughout this story was really great. I feel like it makes the reader that much more invested in the story. My only real suggestion here is to possibily break up the first paragraph into two separate ones. It seems somewhat long compared to the others but it is really not that big of deal. It didn't distract from the story whatsoever and it was only a real general thing I saw. Great start to your storybook. It is coming together very nicely!
Hey Avery! I really love the layout of your website. The central alignment works really well with the structuring of your paragraphs in two columns. It makes for a really nice visual presentation of your writing. The bolding of the first parts of each paragraph make it really easy to follow along and see the separation. Also it helps if you're going back through rereading looking for a certain part.
ReplyDeleteI really like the basis of your storybook. I like the fact that you are using one character and then taking us on a journey to all these different places to meet other characters. It really feels like we are going on an adventure with the rabbit Oak.
I liked the fact that you seem to be giving us 3 images with each story. These images really give us a visual of where Oak is traveling to and help us imagine the setting. I hope you keep up with that for your last 2 stories. I also really like your links to the next story at the end of the current stories. This really helps create a sense of continuity with your story as we transition from one page to the next very smoothly.
Avery,
ReplyDeleteYour storybook is exceedingly well done! It read like a travel diary in The New Yorker or something. I especially thought that the design of your introduction and the continuity between each subsequent post. The column-style that you used for the text was excellent; it gives the story a sense of urgency, much like a newspaper clipping or other journalistic-type publication. Is this what you were shooting for? If so, you've succeeded?
Also, the way in which you opened the story entitled "Africa" was wonderful. I felt as though I could've been stepping out onto the tarmac along with Oak.
The dialogue you use - especially the colloquialism that you endow to Brer - is fantastic. It kept the story fresh and yet stylistically correct.
The only critique I have is that sometimes, the bolded font at the onset of each paragraph was a bit distracting -- and that just seems like a lot of work for the author! Just a thought.
Well done. I look forward to reading the rest of your project!
Hey, Avery! I love the quote for your introduction – it was a really good way to start. I also really liked how you made the first sentence or first part of the sentence bold-faced text – that makes the blog look so professional as well as break up the paragraphs. The introduction was extremely well-written and lays out the storybook in an organized manner. I thought that was really neat and I haven’t seen an introduction done quite like the way you did it before. Also, having a link on the page to the next story in the form of a question was very creative. For the Africa story, everything from Brer’s dialect to the explanation at the bottom of the story that “goober” means “peanut” was great – I’m very impressed. I can’t think of any improvements. Everything from the pictures to the formatting to the story itself was extremely well-done. I am very excited to read more of your stories!
ReplyDeleteAvery!!!!
ReplyDeleteI've come to creep on you! I opened up the roster for Myth-Folklore and couldn't help but click on your name when I saw it.
Your site is absolutely so wonderfully done. The layout is easy to navigate. The neutral color scheme is simple, letting your writing really shine. The idea of traveling from country to country and telling a story along the way is such a cool idea. Opening with the quote in the beginning of the introduction really opens the topic well- your choice would seem a little unexplained otherwise.
The way you opened each paragraph with a bolded line lets us as readers move on to each idea. Involving the quotes of the story into your story is quite nice as well. It gives so much explanation for the inspiration to your story, without having to actually explain yourself. It’s a genius idea.
I am so glad that I've gotten to accidentally run across your little Storybook. It was really a treat!
Hi Avery!
ReplyDeleteI love the layout of your storybook project. The central alignment of the tabs for the introduction and each story make your site very easy to navigate. The column format that you used in your writing worked very well. It made the stories flow nicely and I liked how you bolded the beginning line of each section in the columns. I also love the concept of your story. Once I graduate, I really want to travel so your themes of travel and adventure and discovering the World ad who you are really hit home with me and drew me in. You did a great job with your first story. When I read Brer Rabbit during our Africa unit, I found it kind of difficult to navigate through all of the dialect. It was very smart of you to stay true to the dialect by writing Brer’s speaking parts using dialect rather than writing the entire story in dialect. I really enjoyed your story and am excited to read more.
I love the design of your blog. It is so clean and easy to read. By using the white background the person's eye is drawn to the important stuff . . . the words. Also it is kind of like a piece of paper with typing on it. I also like the font. Yep. Yep. Your blog is pretty awesome!
ReplyDeleteHey, Avery! I really like how your blog is organized. The white background is very clean-cut and helps your labels, text, and Pinterest board stand out. Speaking of labels and pinterest board, I love how the colors of the pinterest board pop and how the labels are written in a simple text but how it also looks so elegant. Keep up the wonderful work!
ReplyDeleteAvery, first of all, I really like your site theme and layout. It is my favorite that I have seen on the Google sites platform so far. It goes perfectly with your theme and is very simple yet pleasing to the eye. The text layout is easy to read and looks somewhat like an article layout (which is very clever). The tabs are all easy to find and self-explanatory. Great job on the site!
ReplyDeleteYour introduction was very well written. It was extremely clever how you broke the stories/ places out into paragraphs (with the first sentence bold). It made the introduction easy to follow and it gave a great preview to what is ahead. My favorite part of your introduction was the phrase “I’ve lost the Thumper in me.” I think that resonates with most people, regardless of age. You really did an excellent job from the layout to the art choices. I cannot wait to read more!
Hi Avery!
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I really like the way you organized your blog. The welcome page is clean and simple, but it sparked my interest to read your stories. Well done. I also like the background picture you chose and the neutral colors. It is calming to look at and creates a nice environment to read your stories.
I enjoyed reading your introduction. I haven't read or thought about the Velveteen Rabbit since I was a little kid, so thanks for taking such great childhood book and reminding me of my younger years. Kind of nostalgic.
I read your stories of Africa and India. I thought it was a really cool idea to title each story a different place and features a new adventure. I particularly liked the line in India, "The opposite of foolishness is wisdom." I thought all your sentences flowed nicely and the paragraphs were organized well.
Your project is unique. I have read a lot of different portfolios and storybooks by now and I really like the creative approach you took. I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future!
I am so glad that you changed the last line of the Introduction to a link to the next page. It really allows you to just keep in the moment instead of having to scroll back up and try to figure out what you need to click on next. Most people can do that, but I have a very short attention span, so when I start something any little thing can make me “squirrel” LOL I also like how you put different pictures up on each page that corresponds with the place. It’s almost like he is posting pictures of his travels :)
ReplyDeleteI also loved your Brer Rabbit story. You really kept the spirit of the stories all the way through the telling of it.
I really enjoyed the India story. I haven’t read any of the India folktales so it was nice to get to read one and, it was funny. Poor little guy! It reminded me of chicken little.
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ReplyDeleteAvery, I am a great lover of Jane Austen and almost all of her books (except Northranger Abbey; I just could not enjoy it), so thank you so much for comparing my writing with hers. I love that era of writing as well. My favorite Jane Austen novels are Persuasion and Mansfield Park; both are so scandalous and endearing. Thanks for taking the time to read my stories :)
Hey Avery, I would like to say that I really appreciate you leaving comments on my blog. I know it is an assignment but all feedback is worth it. I am glad that you enjoyed reading my project. I think it is cool that I can write something for others to enjoy. I will work on those things that you suggested I need improvement on. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteHi Avery,
ReplyDeleteI just read your post entitled "India" and enjoyed the crisp, varied diction you used and the brief paragraphs that made the story flow quite nicely. Also, the site's design is great; it's both aesthetically pleasing and organized. I had read one of your stories before and wanted to read another, so thanks for writing your stories into one continuous narrative.
My one critique is that your writing seems to lack a good deal of dialogue. While I understand that Brer's journey is kept in a sort of journal, and the reader is privy to his thoughts along the way, the minimal dialogue made the story slightly difficult to follow at times. I found myself wondering where the narration was going and feeling like the overall tone of the story was one of nostalgia, yet the nostalgia was not enhanced by a sense of an "active" storytelling.
Despite this, the overall design and theme for your story was well done. You illustrated the theme well at the end of the story but avoided being too obvious about it, which seems hard to do.
Nice work. I'll look forward to reading the rest of your stories.
First of all, I absolutely love how you set up your website. The split columns of text is so unique! All of the other storybooks I've seen have just had one big clump. Also, the links to the next story at the end of the current story make it so easy to maneuver through your storybook. I read the Introduction and Africa. I am also excited to read Australia. I've been obsessed with this country lately and want to see what stories come out of the region. The quote at the top of the Introduction page is lovely. I've never heard anything like it before! It took me a bit to relate it to the stories in your book, but I think it has to do with comparing Real to adventure. It might hurt a little on the path to adventure, but it's totally worth it. I thought it would be cool to include a conclusion page of sorts and write how this quote ties into your storybook. You've done a wonderful job setting this up. Keep writing!
ReplyDeleteWow, Avery! Your storybook is incredible! Seriously, I've seen many good projects and good-looking projects, but yours is just phenomenal. First of all, it looks amazing. It looks like a professionally put together website. The layout, the little touches in the text design, and the pictures all come together to make this polished-looking, whole piece. Your writing is just as good as your design. Again I have to use the word professional because it sounds like the introduction and story I read (Africa with Brer Rabbit) were written by a pro author. I read and rewrote my own version of the Brer Rabbit and Brer Bear story, so I knew the background material well and you nailed it. The dialogue sounds exactly like Brer Rabbit; you really captured his spirit in the story. Overall, your project is a smash hit with me. It looks great and it sounds great. Really awesome job.
ReplyDeleteAvery,
ReplyDeleteI've commented before and I am glad I got to come back and see how your storybook ended up. I read the story "India" this time around. I really enjoyed how your story had a real meaning behind it. Following "blindly" can definitely lead to some embarrassing situations. I also thought it was very cool how you included a little Indo-Aryan language into the story by naming Oak's uncle Ajan. Once again, your picture selection and layout of your website make it extremely easy to read and navigate. This is one of the best and organized storybooks I have seen this semester. I really like how Oak's entire journey is shaping him as you stated. Your author's note was very thorough and explained every little nuisance in your story that alluded to your creativity. It also showed exactly your thoughts and the direction you were trying to achieve. I'd say you did it. You've done a really awesome job on this!
Avery, I'm so sad I'm just now seeing your Storybook! I love it! I mean, seriously, it's great. For starters, the layout that you chose is so great! The layout and background help the project stand out in the best way. I also love the images you chose! They seemed so clean and fresh. I've read your storytelling posts throughout the semester, and it's been so nice to see that your storytelling style has remained consistent. I really enjoyed reading your introduction. The quote at the beginning was so fitting! Everything just went together so well. Your writing was also really easy to read and kept me interested. The beginning also reminded me a little bit of the Hobbit! I read the rest of the tales in your project, and I just adored everything. Your writing also gave me an insane case of wanderlust! I think this has been one of my favorite Storybooks this semester. Wonderful job!
ReplyDeleteWhat a great story. I really fell in love with rabbit. I am a big fan of stepping out of my comfort zone; it is the best way to grow as a person. That being said I loved how rabbit decided to step out and see the world. I liked how in your intro he went back and for on living his nice little town. He was happy there, but you did a good job expressing his curiosity and how it got the better of him for good reasons. Once he finally got out and did it, he seemed to not regret his decision. For school’s sake I wont be finishing your storybook this semester; however, when I find time I will. I really want to see what happens with rabbit in the other countries besides Africa. Your story has defiantly got my attention and curiosity and it wont be satisfied until I finish your storybook.
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